Bree K's Business Letter....Is this good? - dental business letter
January 15, 2009
Anyone,
Hello, I'm Breanna core, and I am currently in the process Joyce Clark Middle School in Sierra Vista, Arizona. I am in eighth grade and the honor of Mrs. Williams in English class. I am preparing a presentation on the problems, dental disease
among young adults.
My priority is to encourage children to take better care of teeth. I think it is very important to educate children about their teeth, because many people think of them that keeps their teeth and gums perfectly forever. Because of this belief to do, they do not floss and brush their teeth twice a day. I know it can cause many diseases, and finally, the various types of cancer.
It would be very grateful if you could send be caused by poor oral hygiene from brochures, statistics and information on gum disease, halitosis, gingivitis and other diseases. To read Thank you for your time from your busy day to my letter and wish you a good day.
Best regards,
Breanna core
Thursday, February 4, 2010
Dental Business Letter Bree K's Business Letter....Is This Good?
6 comments:
HELLO,
is a good card, but change the word "May" and "will" and "send" and not "sent" because it is grammatically correct.
Typo: "It would be very grateful if you could send brochures ..."
Should be sent:
Typo: "It would be very grateful if you could send brochures ..."
Should be sent:
Typo: "It would be very grateful if you could send brochures ..."
Should be sent:
Need to send in the rule. Otherwise, nice job! They have everything well explained!
Edit: Then I would not change. It would make no sense at all!
You do not get cancer if you do not, flossing and brushing teeth
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